Tuesday, April 28, 2009

Confinement



Closed in a tank
Only to fake fun
No access to the world
Funny for morons
Incarceration in all
Nullified mobility
Echoes cruelty of
Mankind
Entreating freedom
Not just awe
The fishes in glass tank

Written as prompted in: Acrostic Only

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10 comments:

  1. Amias (ljm and liquidplastic)April 28, 2009 at 2:05 AM

    The picture is beautiful, and the fish confinement is echoes in your acrostic.

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  2. Sneha ShrivastavaApril 28, 2009 at 5:36 AM

    Awesome!.
    Have a nice day.:)

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  3. Winnie the poohiApril 28, 2009 at 2:24 PM

    ingenious! Loved this attempt :)

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  4. PULKITApril 28, 2009 at 6:38 PM

    well written!
    :)
    good job sir, as always!

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  5. workhardApril 28, 2009 at 11:01 PM

    HI.. nice poem, that is so true,how we zap other creatures freedom.. think of it, even birds also..


    Haiku Poems

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  6. MaggieApril 30, 2009 at 1:56 AM

    Tan,
    I like the poem you did with the prompt, "Confinement"

    I think as time goes by you are learning to confine your lines a bit in your acrostics.

    I think...You did well with this one.

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  7. MaggieApril 30, 2009 at 1:58 AM

    WHY DO YOU HAVE TO BE APPROVED BEFORE A COMMENT IS SHOWED HERE.

    I REALLY DO NOT CARE FOR THAT KIND OF RESTRICTION ON A COMMENT I MIGHT WANT TO MAKE ON ANY BLOG.

    JUST MY OPINION.

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  8. TanApril 30, 2009 at 5:01 AM

    Maggie, I removed it. I enabled this for a few days - just to check how it goes. I see YOU are not happy with Comment Moderation and hence, its GONE now!!!

    Abt your comment:
    You are right... I recently enjoyed a Workshop on Acrostics and that has taught me a few things about the format... So, putting in efforts to near these to perfection... Thanks for the thoughts :)

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  9. roshwritesMay 2, 2009 at 5:06 PM

    I really feel sorry for the animals who have lived their life in cages or tanks... I'm glad you are raising awareness of this and it has been writen very well.

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  10. TanMay 4, 2009 at 7:47 PM

    Thanks everyone for the read. Read me again, and I will write more, for sure...

    Ahem! That was the Promise made!

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Warm Regards,
Tan :)

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