Monday, July 20, 2009

As I left...

As I left

She was standing by the tree

Her big wet eyes staring at me

She tried, but could tell not a word

She looked up, praying to the lord

And I left


As I left

The road cried as I stepped on it

The clouds rumbled as I took the street

The air whistled through the bamboo woods

I walked past, as my mind broods

And I left


As I left

The moon hid behind the cloud

The lark screamed pretty aloud

The drops of tears left her eyes

As she looked up into the skies

And I left


As I left

Something broke in me, deep inside

As I leave alone my newlywed bride

I wanted to too, but I did not cry

But she did, as she bid me goodbye

And I left for the border – as my motherland calls for me…

11 comments:

  1. wow that was sad but really beautiful poem!
    Amazing indeed :)

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  2. Wow Tan... so touching and beautiful... I loved this! :)

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  3. well...this reminds me of the poem which i had in my 6th class....really wonderful simple nd expresses feelings of a soldier when duty calls :)

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  4. Emotions so well portrayed, what a couple goes through, the pain, the separation, sacrifices when fighting for the country. Very well written. Can so relate to this.

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  5. that's superb Tan bhai
    kya likhate ho

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  6. ah! long time!

    this is probably one of the simplest poems i've read...and yet, one can't help but be touched by a certain sense of agony. beautifully expressed!

    p.s. i took a very daring leap and penned a few words in bengali! first time :)...plz do take a peek wen u have time :) (correct spelling mistakes, if any :P)

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  7. @ Mysterious Gal

    Thanks for coming back to my blog and reading me. I am happy to see people still remembering me...

    @ Rosh...

    Thanks Little Girl :)

    @ Stephen

    Duty calls mate... and the call that the soldier hears are far to aloud!

    @ Anonymous

    I am not sure if you are the same one who used to comment on my blog. But I thank you for coming and reading me... I know I have been absent a lot - but I am happy to see you remembered :)

    @ Chirag

    Dhanyabaad dost... will write more in some time...

    @ Neha (Misty Rhythm)

    There are true incidents in life, when suddenly - out of nothing, you feel sad or pain - sometimes, you give it a reason, sometimes - it just remains within... A soldiers life is far more than a reason...
    Read your poem... check my comment - that should tell it all!!

    Thanks mates for the visit... will write again and write more :)
    Cheers!!

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  8. Hey a very creative blog indeed :)
    and thanks for such a warm welcum at WL :)
    cheers!!!

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  9. omg! thanks so much for stopping by Tan.. I am sooooooooo touched!!

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  10. simple yet awesome.. you expressed the feelings in a right way

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Tan :)

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