Wednesday, March 4, 2009

कहाँ हो तुम?


तेरी आँखों में मैं
खो गया हूँ
कुछ इस तरह से
जैसे बादल में खो जाता है चन्द्रमा ।

तेरी होंटों को
छूने की चाहत है
कुछ ऐसा
जैसे वोही मेरे दिलकी है रहनुमा ।

तेरी गेसुओं की तले
रात भर सोना चाहता हूँ
तेरी बाँहों में आके
आँख भर रोना चाहता हूँ,
तुझे ढूंढे मेरी हर साँस
तुझे पुकारे आता जाता हर लम्हा ॥

Sahityika suggested the second stanza to be like this (3/5/09):

तेरे होंटों को
छूने की चाहत है
कुछ ऐसी
जैसे तू ही मेरे दिल की है रहनुमा ।

9 comments:

  1. it was beautiful Tan..

    just the last sentence it is
    'aata jaata lamha'

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  2. badhia likha yaar
    bas jati hai chandrama ki jagaha
    jata hai chandrama

    baki to bahut shadar likha hai

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  3. a very beautiful and romantic poem again.. hope all your dreams come true.. all the best wishes

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  4. काजल और चिराग,
    यहाँ आने के लिए और पड़ने के लिए धन्यबाद... काफी दिनों बाद मैंने हिंदी में लिखा है ... ख़ुशी हुई जानके के तुम लोगो को अच्छा लगा... और वो गडबडी जो थी, मैंने ठीक कर दिया है... जल्दी जल्दी पढ़के बताने के लिए शुक्रिया ;) कोई देखने से पहले ही मैंने बदल दिया ... हे हे हे हे ... ऐसे ही जल्दी जल्दी बताया करो तो मेरा कुछ अच्छा हो...

    And thanks for all your love and complements ... keep visiting ...

    Cheers!!

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  5. तेरे होंठों को
    छूने की चाहत है
    कुछ ऐसी
    जैसे तू ही मेरे दिल की है रहनुमा.

    mujhe lagta hai ..its better..

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  6. I cna't read it but the picture is wonderful.

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  7. I came, I looked but could not read ... I enjoyed the comments telling me what I could not see.

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  8. Hi Tan, Kahan ho tum? ;-) Loved the poem.

    Btw fyi, THIRTY brand NEW links have been added in to HellLottaLinks, the blog u have liked so far. I still await for ur suggestions and comments.

    Hey Tan, could you recommend any 2 best bloggers that U really like?? I'd love to include the 2 u suggest in my list of Rocking bloggers. Let them know u like them so much that u have recommend them, wot say?? Send me their links.

    (btw, I secretly follow ur blog too.)
    Anand. :-)

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  9. @ Sahityika

    आपकी लिखी हुई पंग्तियाँ मैंने दाल दी है ताकि दुसरो को पता चले that modification ... मुझे भी लग रहा था के कुछ तो गड़बड़ है ... लिखने के लिए धन्यबाद...

    @ Spacedlaw and Amias

    The latest poem was in Hindi... I write in Hindi too in this blog... I try to use the language that would suit perfect for a thought to be expressed... I'm thankful that you visited... Would like it more when you read my other posts here ... I do write in English also :P

    @ Anand

    I have already talked about HellLottaLinks with a few of my blogmates ... Will do that once more and about the suggestion? Hmmm ... let me think... will let you know mate ...

    And why are you secretly following the blog? Follow it publicly, so that people can visit yours from here itself...

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Thanks for reading me and choosing to comment. Your comment always encourages me to write more and write sense. Keep visiting, whenever you can and comment on the posts. I will be more than eager to receive your comments and suggestions.

Warm Regards,
Tan :)

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